Self composition – Rain

Rohan, 🙂

Congratulations on getting your original song recorded! Even though it may stilll be a “work-in-progress,” having a recording (IMO) is the best way to hear additional ideas and to get motivated to finish an idea too! 🙂

I liked a lot of your ideas, including the main themes. That said, the following are things that you may want to consider either for this song, or in other songs in future situations:

– In your “Bass-Line” idea (perhaps you tracked this as a clean guitar in a lower register?) whereby you played that “B Minor Blues Scale” descending motif. I LIKED that idea, but maybe NOT every time around. In other words, instead of using it as an “every-time-around” ostinato, perhaps you could “pace” that idea in as the song progresses? Maybe you could try playing more of a “follow-the-root” approach at first, and then introduce the descending blues-line as the melodies get introduced gradually…See what I mean? 😉

– I liked your melody-motifs in BOTH sections! I just thought that perhaps you could do some “variation-of-theme” especially in the “Verse-part” (that’s what I hear it as!) Ya know the part whose progression is like: 6/8-time ||:_Bm______|_Bm______|_Bm______|_G____A__:|| ) As I said, I also liked your idea over the ||:_Em_____|_A______:|| part also!) 😎

– In the solo, I liked your little twist when you played a bit of “B” Harmonic Minor. That was cool! Also, your use of the “B” Minor Blues scale was effective at times, but you may have “gone to the well once too often!” (Bad American cliche there, sorry…LOL!) But seriously, the Minor Blues Scale always works over a static Aeolian progression (which your “A-section” seems to be) but when you kept using it over the “B-section” or “Eminor-to-Amajor” part, I kept hearing the “B Minor Blues” scale’s flat-fifth note=”F” clashing a bit with both chords (Emin and Amaj.) You could try playing “E-Dorian” over this section, (or anything that remains relative to the song’s “B-Minor/D-Major” key-signature.) Also, when in doubt, targeting chord-tones NEVER fails – LOL! Do you agree? Anyways, if you can keep the cool stuff in that solo and maybe eliminate a bit of that excessive “blues-tension,” I thin you’ll have a keeper! 😎

Best of luck bro, and excellent job overall! 😉

~Bill Meehan~ 😀