You found a good steady groove there man. However, you are almost only utilizing the 8th’s and 16th note values, and not really getting “funky” with it. One of the MOST important things to consider when playing funk is the ability to play with and against the beat, especially using 16th notes. For example, if you really wanted to make this funk, you could try to play with and against the beat in the backing, as opposed to now, where you’re not really paying any attention to it (apart from in part 3, but then only as a pre-determined line). Also, try to play against the beat on the second 16th note in every grouping. That syncopation is key to grooving.
Also, try to get some triplets in there, which would spice things up rhythmically.
You’re note choice is good for the backing, mainly a dorian feel. You might want to try a mixolydian pentatonic, and some altered scales and diminished for passing. Using chromatics is a good idea, bu then you have to have an entry and exit strategy or it will only sound “out” (not in the good way =) )
Basically, you have good enough note choice, overall clean tech. However, what is missing IMO is in the timing department (plz take this as constructive criticism bro =) )
Your ideas are good, they just might some refinement to better suit the backing, having a better flow, and more interesting rhythm and note choice.
A simple enough thing for you to do would be to take all the licks you’ve used in this impro, and run each and everyone of them through my
“Timing and Note Value Variation” tutorial. https://www.infiniteguitar.com/viewtutorial.php?tutorial=139
After that, the last parts of my Funk 101 tutorial, could be the next step for being able to get those into a funk groove, and getting into the whole idea of playing with and against the beat, in this tutorial you can also practice with some backing tracks to each idea.
Just start here, and work your way forward.
https://www.infiniteguitar.com/viewlesson.php?lessonid=581
And finally, to go more fusion with it, diving into the use of Line Alternations and cromatics, you can check out my Line Alterations tutorial. When going through the improvised solo, make sure to to see how I’ve altered the ideas in actual improvisation, and think how you could alter your own ideas in that way.
https://www.infiniteguitar.com/viewtutorial.php?tutorial=122
Let me know how you fair with all of this, and PLEASE post a new impro later (preferably over the same backing) so we can hear you progress.
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